I’m experimenting here. Every alternate line links with the other, i.e. the bold with the bold & the italics with the italics, to form two separate poems in essence. If you’ll read it as such.
Two feet separates them at the dining table.
They straddle different continents.
A foot separates them on the bed at night.
He awakens when she’s asleep.
Six inches separate them on the couch.
Every waking moment seems like an eternity.
An armrest separates them at the movies.
They have an evening drink in loneliness.
They dance cheek to cheek.
They share a dream on different beds.
They inhabit different worlds.
They live in each other’s hearts.
Physical proximity, a chasm.
In the distance, a close union.
So well brought out the tale of separation. That unfortunately is the story of many working couples today.
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Thanks, Radhika, a as always
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this is the tale of my life…. 🙂
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Ah, take care, Amit! And thanks!
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you too Dada!
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Kunal loved the picture so apt and superbly brought out the story of separation of so many couples today who are working like mad and for what. Great lines that tells the truth.
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Thanks, Kamal! It was an attempt to showcase how one couple can live together but yet not be emotionally connected, while another can be separated by distance yet have a soul connection.
Thanks for coming across and commenting. Blessings!
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Yes for sure could understand what you were saying Kunal and I agree with your poem that it happens with many couples but that is life and one has to learn how to adjust and live it. Have a great day and keep posting such beautiful posts.
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Thanks, Kamal! And you have a lovely day yourself!
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Welcome Kunal.
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First, I think your use of the technique is brilliant illustrating both the paradox and the discreet nature of each situation. Bittersweet I think. Of course,the second one is my favourite – what romance in the thought. A sad reality Kunal but I loved your poem nevertheless – soul connection is my thing! 😀
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Thank you very much!
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My pleasure Kunal, enjoy your day!
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From the title, to the sentiment this one hits home for us. As for the style and diction, Bravo! You might have gotten the Emotional Spaces more emotional.
Need we say more? 😊
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👍😊🙏🏽
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Very cohesive read both ways, and quite emotionally poignant… I would say your experiment is a grand success! All the best to you w/blessings! 🙂
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Thank you, sir!
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So close yet so far away and so far away yet so close. Wonderful, Kunal!
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Thank you, bro!
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You’re welcome!
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This is brilliant!!! Avery creative way of writing.
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Thank yuhu 😉
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Oh! Wow! Such (silent) expressive excellence. 🌹🌹🌹
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Thank you, Dorna, appreciate it!
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This is truly amazing! 💕
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Many thanks 😊
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A perfect blend of form fitting function…an architectural masterpiece.
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Many Thanks 🙏🏽
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Your brilliance is simply awesome.Am extremely proud of you.Love you.
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Thanks you, dad. And ditto!
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I agree…this was brilliant! The concept was unique and in a very simple and beautiful way you touched hearts. Even the title was enticing.
Personally, I prefer the 2nd type of togetherness 🙂
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Thanks so much, Sonya
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Whistles!!! ❤️💜 My goodness, this is absolutely inspirational Kunal 😀 I love how you linked each phrase and managed to combine two poems into one! It feels like a romantic sequel! Sigh.. beautifully penned (as always) ❤️💜
Lots of love,
Sanaa
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Sanaa, thanks very much! I really, really appreciate your encouragement! God bless you always!
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❤️
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I like it. It works reading it in sequence or as two separate poems.
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Thank you, Sir!
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Well done!
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Thank you, Annika-behn 😉
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Amazing!!!
Check out my blog also for experiencing the magic of letters.
Hope You will like it. 🙂
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Thank you, I will! 😊
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I like what you did here. Two poems for the price of one : ) I’m so glad I don’t have to have a long distance relationship. That would be soooo hard.
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Thank you, Debi! But don’t you think it’s equally hard for a couple who live together yet in different worlds?
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Yes, it can be for sure. My grandparents raised me and they didn’t love each other but they still took care of each other. I always felt sorry for them but they seemed content and they gave me lots of security. I guess it can be torturous or just another fact of life. But, I am glad not to experience either of your scenarios though you did a marvelous job of showing them.
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This is not an uncommon. It is a real test of love especially with parental duties not then being shared. Being a weekend husband and father is not the best. Luckily those days are long behind me now. Great work in running the two poems in parallel.
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Thank you!
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a truth so cleverly crafted….
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Thank you, Sumana, appreciate it! 👍
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What an interesting exercise and I think you have succeeded really well in juxtapositioning the two concepts of physical distance and distant closeness. Bravo! I did like the gradual progression on the physical side from 2 feet to 1 foot to 6 inches to armrest to cheek etc. Astute my friend… very astute! On the other side it is the soul that connects… and the soul knows no distance, for time and space pose no limits. I really liked this Kunal and Thank You for drawing my attention to your poem. We are all well here in snowy Lanark. A cold Wintry day here. Regards to you all! 🙂
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Thank you, Krys! Coincidentally, I was just showing my daughter the clip of your doggy’s ears flapping in the wind, from your post on FB! 😊
You have wonderful, wintry weekend, my dear!
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Thank you my friend. I have finally reconnected with my Blog after all this time…and even now it’s not going to be for long as I am off to Oz a week tomorrow, but I want to promote my daughter’s Book- Descendants by Rae Else on here. I know I have missed lots of your posts Kunal, but it’s been a strange six months and I think this long break will be good for recharging the creative batteries. I shall keep in touch via good ol’ Facebook. My good wishes to you all and I did enjoy reading your last poem about REM sleep, nightmares and being together in that place where we go when the body switches off! 🙂
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Thank you, my dear! You have a lovely Aussie holiday! Hugs to you and MM 🙂
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I love how you have intertwined the desire to be near and the loneliness of separation. An intriguing style that works 🙂
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Thank you so much, ma’am!
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I’ve read this several times over the span of a couple days. I find it so cleverly devised the way you’ve succeeded in making it more than just one poem. Fascinating. Really well done 🙂
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Oh, thanks! Am glad it works & I really appreciate you coming by regularly! Blessings!
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Fascinating! There are quite a few ancient Hebrew poems intertwined this way, but I’ve never seen it done in English, and so well.
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Is it? Thanks for letting me know an interesting piece of information! Bless you!
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Blessings to you as well!
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Thank you
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🙂
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Oh bravo! Beautifully executed. I like the two poems in one. Reminds me of a Super Tanka, but linear instead of side-by-side.
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Wow, thank you, means a lot to me!
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Beautifully thought of. The contrast between the separate couples is very apparent!
Hank
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‘Hank you 😜
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Yes I’ve read this type of poem before, I don’t know the name of the form. It works well for you and the images are such good accompaniments
Have a Happy St Valentine’s Day
much love…
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Thanks, Gillena !
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I love this, Kunal 🙂
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Thank you, Em dear
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Beautiful presentation!
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Thank you!
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Ww. This one is so beautiful. Really great work.
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Hey, thanks a ton! 😀
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🙂
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